Peer Edits

I peer edited Alyssa Smith and Kelsey Schile's news stories. I left comments on their blogs and used "**" to show where things should be changed.

News Story

With 9 seniors, there is no doubt that the Eastview Girls' Soccer team is full of leaders.  It was a tough decision for a couple players when they realized that the team would be without a goalkeeper this year, but they knew they had what it took to step up.

“I made the decision to become goalie because my coach asked me to and I know he thought it was the best decision for our team. I did it for them.” RACHEL

Having two seniors, Bri MacDonald and Rachel Nault, as goalies, who also play on the field just shows how versatile the soccer team is and how much they care about eachother.

“Senior leadership is very strong this year, especially with Bri and Rachel stepping up.” COURTNEY

There are a lot of tough moments for keepers but they always keep their heads up and know that they are helping the team no matter what. They also get to live in the glory of their wins.

“I enjoy making those awesome game winning saves.” BRI

Both of these girls are impact players in the net. They have positive attitudes and the team is very thankful to have girls willing to do anything for their teammates. They’re on their way to making their season truly unforgettable.

Interview Answers

Courtney Driscoll -
1. The team chemistry this year is really great. We don't really have any cliques, and all of the grades seem to get along well. We spend a lot of time together off the field, which is fun.
2. I feel pretty safe having Bri and Rachel in net. They're playing well and giving it a great effort and that's all we can ask for!
3. Senior leadership is very strong this year, especially with Bri and Rachel stepping up. We all want to have a successful season, so we're doing our best to contribute whatever it is that we can to the team!

Bri MacDonald -
1. I decided to step up to goalie because I was confident in my abilities as a keeper.
2. I enjoy making those awesome game winning saves.
3. I think it differs from field because it feels like a lot more responsibility.

Rachel Nault -
1. I made the decision to become goalie because my coach asked me to and I know he thought it was the best decision for our team. I love our team so I did it for them.
2. I don't enjoy that much about playing goalie other than having a good view of the whole field and the game. My team also supports me a lot.
3. Playing goalie is different because you don't run as much and it's very nerve wracking because if you make a mistake it's a goal for the other team. When you're a field player, if you make a mistake, you don't have to worry as much because there usually is someone to back you up.

Interview

Courtney Driscoll - 
1. How is the team chemistry so far?
2. How do you feel about having Rachel and Bri, two field players, in net?
3. What are your thoughts on the senior leadership on the team and how it correlates with two seniors stepping up?

Bri MacDonald -
1. How did you make your decision to be the goalkeeper this year?
2. What do you enjoy most about playing goalie?
3. How is GK different from playing on the field, besides obviously that you can use your hands?

Rachel Nault -
1. How did you make your decision to be the goalkeeper this year?
2. What do you enjoy most about playing goalie?
3. How is GK different from playing on the field, besides obviously that you can use your hands?

Story Topic & Angle

Field Players Stepping in Net

Writing a Story Notes

Writing a Story Notes

1. Find a _TOPIC_.
What is your story about?
Who is your audience?
Why is this story important to your audience?

2. Find an _ANGLE_.
More specifically, what is important about your topic?
What should the reader learn?

3. Collect __DATA/INFORMATION__.
Who are three experts for this story?
Do you need opposing points of view?
What interview questions should I ask?
What other research must be done to complete the story?

4. Gather __INTERVIEWS__.
Ask open-ended questions.
Get good sound bytes. (A sound byte is a piece of audio that can stand on its own.)
Have person restate the question in the interview.
Interview at least 3 people and ask at least 3 questions.

5. Organize your _SOUND_ _BYTES_.
Which quotes should be used?
How can I organize the quotes to tell a story?

6. Write ___TRANSITIONS/SEGUES__ in your story.
Use words to tie the interviews together.
What other information can I add to the story?
Can the story stand on its own?

7. Write _INS_ and _OUTS_.
What should the anchors say to introduce my story or bring it to a close? No Scoop, Went to find out,
How should the story begin and end?
What should I say in my stand-up? No 1st Person: I went…
Use attention getter at the introduction but avoid rhetorical questions.

8. Collect ___B-ROLL___ to add to your story. (B-ROLL is video footage. A-ROLL is the audio in the story. Also includes natural sound; audio from the real world used in the story.)
How can video enhance my story?
Make a list of items you would like photographed.
How should I edit the audio and video together to enhance my story?
Should other enhancements like music, graphics, effects be used?

Notes on Broadcast Journalism Law/Ethics

1. What are the 5 freedoms of the 1st amendment?
Religion, Speech, Assembly, Press, Petition

2. What is the Tinker Standard?
Student speech cannot be censored as long as it does not "materially disrupt class work or involve substantial disorder or invasion of the rights of others."
You don't shed first amendment rights when you come into school.

3. What is the Fraser Standard?
Because school officials have an "interest in teaching students the boundaries of socially appropriate behavior," they can censor student speech that is vulgar or indecent, even if it does not cause a "material or substantial disruption."

4. What is the Hazelwood Standard?
Censorship of school-sponsored student expression is permissable when school officials can show that it is "reasonably related to legitimate pedagogical concerns."

5. What is the Frederick Standard?
If you are on a school authorized field trip, you are bound to the jurisdiction of the school.

6. What is the definition of libel?
A false and malicious publication printed for the purpose of defaming a living person. Legal term for false statements of fact about a person that are printed boradcast, spoken or otherwise communicated to others. Untrue statements about another person that defames one's character.

30 Minute News Assignment

ASSIGNMENT DUE ON FRIDAY:
Watch 30 minutes of the news (write down the show title, channel and time). Write a quick description of the story, the length of the story and which criteria(s) of newsworthiness apply (unusual, timeliness, proximity, significance, prominence, human interest). This assignment is due at the beginning of the hour on Friday, September 17.

Kare 11 News
Channel 11, 10:00 PM

The pay gap between men and women has shrunk. Men are losing more jobs and are having to take lower paying jobs. 10:00 - 10:03 Proximity

1 in 7 Americans are in poverty in the U.S. More people are required to seek assistance for food than ever before. 10:03 - 10:04 Proximity

Woman is in jail for binding her childrens' hands and feet, 30 seconds Unusualness

Man is in jail for providing alcohol to 3 minors, 30 seconds.Unusualness

Service held for a man who was gunned down after posting an ad on Craig's List to sell his car. Suspect wanted to steal the parts. 10:05 - 10:06 Significance

St. Francis school district could possibly be putting up ads on some school lockers to bring in more money. 10:06 - 10:07 Human Interest

Tom Horner layed out a new jobs plan 10:07 - 10:08 Prominence

I-94 right lane was supposed to be changed into an exit only lane, but won't be changed until Saturday because of the rain. 10:08 - 10:09 Proximity

Commercial 10:09 - 10:12

Minnesota reality TV guy hosted a viewing party for the first episode of The Apprentice that he is a contestant on. 10:12 - 10:15 Human Interest

4 years ago today, an F2 tornado struck Rogers, MN and killed a little girl. 10:15 - 10:16 Significance

Spotty colors for fall in northwestern part of Minnesota. 10:16 - 10:17 Proximity

Weather. Going to be a nice weekend with an average temperature of 70 degrees. 10:17 - 10:19. Timeliness

Commercial 10:19 - 10: 23

Twins are playing well. Have scored 27 runs in 3 games. Were currently leading in the ninth inning 8-5. 10:23 - 10:26 Prominence

High school Prep Football scores and game highlights. 10:26 - 10:28 Timeliness

Home opener for the Vikings against Miami. 10:28 - 10:30 Proximity

News Notes

What is Broadcast Journalism?

Define “Broadcast Journalism” in 1-3 sentences.
Delivery of currents events that are newsworthy via the television, radio, or internet.

List and describe the six criteria of newsworthiness.
TITLE DESCRIPTION EXAMPLE

1. Significance- 9/11, forest fires, hurricane

2. Unusualness- Some thing that is out of the ordinary, crime, murders, man biting dog vs. a dog biting a man

3. Timeliness- current traffic and weather

4. Prominence- people, celebrities

5. Proximity- care about the news that is close to us, weather, traffic

6. Human interest- a feel good story, animal born at the zoo, husband saves unborn child


What are the differences between print journalism and broadcast journalism?
1. Broadcast is published a lot sooner than print.

2. Print journalism gives you much more ability to choose what you want.


3. Print journalism has much more time to go into detail.


How is the Internet impacting broadcast journalism?
The internet is allowing accurate news to get out right away as it happens. The videos and audio are live and right at your fingertips. They don't have a limited amount of print space on the internet so stories can be very descriptive.